Livingston READ 7140 Interdisciplinary Writing Unit Narrative Part 2 3rd Grade Haley D Livingston READ 7140 Methods of Teaching Writing Valdosta State University May 2006 Revising 1 Livingston READ 7140 Grade Level Third Content Area Science Content Area GPS Science S3L1 Students will investigate the habitats of different organisms and the dependence of organisms on their habitat a Differentiate between habitats of Georgia mountains marsh swamp coast Piedmont Atlantic Ocean and the organisms that live there Mode of Writing Narrative Stage of Writing Revising English Language Arts GPS Writing ELA3W1 The student demonstrates competency in the writing process The student c Writes text of a length appropriate to address the topic or tell the story e Begins to use appropriate structures to ensure coherence e g transition words and phrases bullets subheadings numbering f Begins to use specific sensory details e g strong verbs adjectives to enhance descriptive effect g Begins to develop characters through action and dialogue h Begins to use descriptive adjectives and verbs to communicate setting character and plot m Prewrites to generate ideas develops a rough draft rereads to revise and edits to correct ELA3C1 The student demonstrates understanding and control of the rules of the English language realizing that usage involves the appropriate application of conventions and grammar in both written and spoken formats The student f Identifies and uses increasingly complex sentence structure g Distinguishes between complete and incomplete sentences Student Materials Writing binder 1 2 inch three ring with clear pocket on front 2 Livingston READ 7140 3 Livingston H D 2006 Ocean animals data collection chart Unpublished manuscript Valdosta State University GA Completed Graphic Organizer Completed Rough Draft Proofreader s sheet Tompkins G E 2004 Teaching children to write Teaching writing Balancing process and product p 23 Upper Saddle River NJ Pearson Root T Narrative writing checklist Valdosta GA Valdosta State University Retrieved on May 11 2006 from http coefaculty valdosta edu troot read7140 Narrative 20Process 20Writing 20Checklist doc Teacher Materials Livingston H D 2006 Ocean animals data collection chart Unpublished manuscript Valdosta State University GA Livingston H D 2006 Narrative prewriting model Unpublished manuscript Valdosta State University GA Livingston H D 2006 Narrative revising model Unpublished manuscript Valdosta State University GA Livingston H D 2006 Narrative revising scoring guide Unpublished manuscript Valdosta State University GA Proofreader s sheet Tompkins G E 2004 Teaching children to write Teaching writing Balancing process and product p 23 Upper Saddle River NJ Pearson Overhead projector Grouping Arrangements Instructional grouping will be whole group during modeling This will encourage active participation among the students and allows them opportunities to ask questions that will benefit the entire group It makes instruction easier and less redundant so that questions and concerns are addressed only once or twice Practice Activity grouping will be in collaborative groups six groups of two Each member will take turns writing throughout the stages of the writing process Groups will be made so that they have mixed ability levels and further support for students with special needs is available Assessment Activity grouping will be individual Each student will make revisions to their draft adding and deleting sentences and details It will be graded using the scoring guide attached Instructional Procedures Mode of Writing Narrative Stage of Writing Revising Stage of Writing Instruction Revising is the third stage of the writing process During the revising stage of writing you will use your rough draft and make changes You will reread your rough draft at least twice You might find that you need to add more information such as more details or more interesting vocabulary You might need to remove words or sentences that do not make sense or are not necessary You might also need to rearrange or reorganize some of your Livingston READ 7140 4 information As you do these things you will use proofreading marks to mark the changes you want to make You will only use three marks deletion caret and transpose during this stage review three marks using marks sheet given to students The purpose of revising is to make your writing more interesting to the reader During this stage you do not need to worry about spelling capitalization or punctuation After I am finished I will go through my drafting checklist to make sure I have every area covered Modeling Have revised draft on the overhead I took a few minutes to reread my rough draft read draft aloud to class and to think about what I had written and how I wanted it to sound I carefully reread each paragraph and looked for words that needed to be changed information that could be deleted and details that could be added I paid careful attention to ways that I could be more descriptive in my writing Go over the introductory paragraph When rereading I decided that I wanted to take out a few words this is the deletion mark If we look further down you can see I wanted to replace the words neat things with treasure I used my deletion marks and wrote the word I wanted in the place of those above them Let s look at the next paragraph I decided to insert a more descriptive sentence so that readers will have a better visual image of what I writing about I also added a few words that were left out Notice the insertion mark that I used for this and that I wrote the words above the mark so that I can seem them clearly We need to be sure to write any words to be corrected or added in above the old word in the sentence If you need to delete information like I did here you would make this mark through the information as I have done here Continue modeling how to make revisions and which marks should be used After I am finished I will go through my revising checklist to make sure I have every area covered Linguistic Cultural Mini Lesson Teacher will give a mini lesson on subject verb agreement sentence structure or writing in Standard English Practice Activity You will take out the rough draft that you and your partner wrote about the blowfish and make changes the way I showed you in my revised draft Together you will need to reread your rough draft and decide what details you need to delete and what details you want to add Remember at this