ANOTHER ANALYSIS OF KUSHMANNOTE: I am not going to give you a complete reanalysis here, but if you follow this basicoutline, you should be OK.Part 1: The ProblemIn your first outlines many of you followed the general order of Kushman's articleand outlined his essay in the following way.Kushman does not like the new Disney "Cinderella" because ithas problems.1) Contradictions2) Stereotypes3) Mixed messages4) MagicSOME SAMPLE PROBLEM AREAS:1. You have the wrong thesis.2. 1-4 are not complete sentences so they can't be supporting arguments.3. 1-4 are not four separate categories. They are all interrelated and at the same timeat different levels of generality.4. (1) and (3) refer to the same idea.5. (2) and (4) are examples that Kushman presented to prove his supportingarguments. They are not separate arguments.In other words, many of your analyses of Kushman were a little confused. However, thisanalysis more or less follows the order of his presentation.If someone presents the following statements in defense of a thesis, you have variouswas to organize them.A + B + C + D + E THESISFor example, A-E all support the THESIS equally. They are all separate arguments.(A <— B+C) + (D <— E) THESISIn this case, we have two arguments, A and D, supports B+C support A and E supportsD.(A <— B) + (C <— D+E) THESISIn this case, we have two arguments, A and C, where B supports A and D+E supports C.The point here is that you should not assume that simply because two statements arenext to each other they belong together. In your own papers, you need to make thelogical relationships between sentences and paragraphs absolutely clear. But manywriters, even professional ones, are frequently sloppy with their organization. Kushman(or his editor) does not always group similar arguments together, so you have to do alittle rearranging. Again, this type of situation is quite common in the popular media.Part 2: The SolutionTo straighten out the logic of Kushman's argument, you first need to state his thesis asclearly as possible. You thesis should not be too general or too specific.Kushman’s main focus in the essay is on what the Disney producers said they weregoing to do versus what they actually did in the film.I believe that the Disney producers failed in their attempt topresent new and enlightened messages and they failed in theirattempt to change some of the old messages in their recentproduction of Cinderella.<Refer to all the Disney people as the “Disney producers” since the director,Iscove, seems not to have had complete control over the themes and messages>NOTE: The Disney spokespersons seem to be referring to both the Rodgers andHammerstein version of Cinderella and the original Disney animated version. SoKushman appears to be referring to both as well.OUTLINE OF KUSHMAN’S SUPPORTING ARGUMENTSSUPPORTING ARGUMENT 1: I BELIEVE THAT NDC FAILS TO PRESENT THE NEWAND ENLIGHTENED MESSAGES PROPOSED BY THE PRODUCERS.Sub-argument 1: As an example of an enlightened message, the producers saythe prince is looking for a soul mate but then the film shows him falling in lovewith her at first sight while later he says he loves her for what she is. I think this isa contradiction.//Add Specific Examples//Sub-argument 2: As another example of an enlightened message that ends upbeing contradicted, the producers say that the new Cinderella takes control of herlife. She is supposed to be a woman who has the power to shape her owndestiny. But then she needs magic and good looks to succeed.//Add Specific Examples//SUPPORTING ARGUMENT 2: I BELIEVE THAT NDC FAILS TO REVISE SOME OFTHE HARMFUL STEREOTYPES THAT WERE PRESENT IN THE ORIGINALVERSIONS.Sub-argument 1: As an example of an old message that has not been changedfrom the original, I believe the film shows the same limitations placed on womenas the old Cinderella. The only thing any woman in the NDC has to look forwardto is marriage. And this includes Cinderella.//Add Specific Examples//Sub-Argument 2: In a similar fashion, I believe the film also continues portraywomen as gold diggers.//Add Specific Examples//Sub-Argument 3: Another example of an old message that has not beenchanged from the original is the film’s treatment of the stepmother andstepsisters. They are evil/bad because they are ugly and unattractive.//Add Specific
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