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California State University, Sacramento
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Engl 20 - College Composition II
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SAMPLE OUTLINE 2 KUSHMAN AND EVER AFTER Thesis In his Sacramento Bee review of the new Disney s Cinderella Rick Kushman argues that the Disney producers failed in their attempt to present enlightened and new messages in their remake Andy Tennant in his remake of the Cinderella story Ever After was also trying to present enlightened messages but unlike the Disney producers the key elements of Kushman s critique of Disney s new Cinderella would not apply to Tennant s Ever After MUST USE FIRST PERSON ALSO COULD BE MORE SPECIFIC REGARDING KUSHMAN Argument 1 First Kushman says that Disney s new Cinderella fails to present the enlightened messages proposed by the producers on the other hand Andy Tennant s Ever After does not DOES NOT WHAT YOU NEED TO BE MORE SPECIFIC EXPLAIN WHAT YOU MEAN Argument 2 Secondly Kushman also says that Disney s new Cinderella fails to present new messages proposed by the producers on the other hand Andy Tennant s Ever After does not YOU NEED TO BE MORE SPECIFIC EXPLAIN I KNOW WHAT YOU MEAN BUT THESE ARGUMENTS DO NOT CLEARLY MATCH THE THESIS BECAUSE THE THESIS IS VAGUE AND THEY ARE EQUALLY VAGUE YOU ALSO DO NOT USE THE FIRST PERSON THIS PARAGRAPH IS TOO SHORT IT IS ONLY THREE SENTENCES AND LOOKS LIKE AN OUTLINE NOT AN INTRO YOU MUST FOLLOW GUIDELINES PARAGRAPH 2 BACKGROUND 1 I am sure this does not make sense so I will back up a few steps and explain Rick Kushman is a Sacramento Bee columnist who critiqued Walt Disney s new Cinderella a remake of the original version Kushman reviewed the new Cinderella primarily to prove of the movie was successful in its main objective SS PROBLEM DOESN T MAKE SENSE In his article Kushman quoted director of the movie Robert Iscove who said It was one of our main concerns to make sure that the story has some relevance to a 90s audience We re trying to empower all of these ladies to realize that the beautiful dress and the externals are inside you that every girl is a princess and they can bring that out My



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