3/2/20101WEEK 7AGENDA|Writing Lesson Plan: Peer Response|Formative Assessment|Language Instructiony Imitationy Sentence Combiningy Vocabulary and Academic LanguagePEER RESPONSE TO LESSON PLAN|20 Minutes (10 minutes each side)|Rich Comments!3FORMATIVE ASSESSMENT|During learning |To INFORM instructiony What does this student know and know how to do?how to do?y What does this student need to learn next?4ASSESSING WRITING5YOU ARE THE TEACHER|DO NOT TURN THE PAGE!!!|ONE minute: read and mark this paper as if you were the teacher.|Score yourself.|Score yourself.|Two minutes in Reflective Journal: What have you learned about assessing student writing? Give yourself one or two pieces of advice to remember the next time you have to respond to student writing.63/2/20102FORMATIVE ASSESSMENTS1. Writing2. Vocabulary3. Conventional Language Use4. Reading 5. Literature7 8Imitation9A Tool for Teaching StyleWhat Is Imitation?Imitation writing is taking the writing of a 'master' and using the structure and patterns as10the structure and patterns as a form to work and learn from. ApprenticeshipImitation: Prose ExamplesModel:“Here it was motels and billboards and the hot jangle of bti d f11neon bursting red over four lanes of concrete.”-Ellington WhiteNow YOU try it…Imitation: Student Samples•Here it was calculus books and term papers and the confining rules of behavior boiling up in 12students.•Here it was umbrellas and towels and the suffocating heat blanketing the granules of sand.3/2/20103Imitation: Prose ExamplesAnother Model:A man on a horse passes slowly, accompanied by a boy 13y, p y yon foot who carries a willow branch.-Joan ColebrookNow YOU try it…Imitation: Student SamplesA man in a Mercedes flies by, accompanied by a woman who has a Louis Vuitton handbag.14A princess on a horse passes slowly, accompanied by a prince on foot who carries a jeweled staff.Imitation: PoetryStudents choose an interesting poem and steal its shape, plugging their own th ht d i i t it f15thoughts and images into its form. They acknowledge the borrowing by writing, “Thanks to…” at the end of their poem.Imitation: PoetrySeparationYour absence has gone through meLike thread through a needle.16Everything I do is stitched with its color.-W.S. MerwinStudent SampleThis assignment has filled meWith yesterday’s garbage.17Everything I do is touched with my boredom.Imitation: PoetryImageOld houses were scaffolding onceAnd workmen whistling.18-T.W. Hulme3/2/20104Student SamplesOld teachers were happier onceWith students smiling.19Old runners were faster onceWith spectators cheering.Student SamplesThese poems were ideas onceAnd a poet struggling.20Imitation: PoetryThis Is Just To SayI have eaten the plumsthat were inthe iceboxand whichyou were probablysavingPlease Accept My ApologiesI didn’t mean to steal your Porsche when you were not around.Anicecar21saving for breakfastforgive methey were deliciousso sweetand so cold.--William Carlos WilliamsA nice car very easy to drive. The Police couldn’t catch me.Forgive me. It was such a beautiful carSo shiny…And so fast…--Bern BrostekZimmer’s Head Thudding Against the BlackboardAt the blackboard I had missed Five number problems in a row,And was about to foul a sixth,When the old, exasperated nunBegan to pound my head against22My six mistakes. When I cried,She threw me back into my seat,Where I hid my head and sworeThat very day I’d be a poet,And curse her yellow teeth with this.--Paul ZimmerRhapsody in Black and BlueSeated at the piano I had playedFive wrong notes in a row.I was about to strike a sixthWhen my old hag of a teacherBegan to pound my head against23The keyboard. When I cried,She plopped me back in my seatWhere I hung my head low and sworeThat very day I’d become a truck driverAnd run her over with my semi.--Stacey Lee (modeled after Paul Zimmer)From the old-school "copybooks" to the increasingly popular "Benjamin Franklin" method, imitation has been a common sense approach to teaching for centuries. Memorizing great chunks of Latin oratory, students in ancient Rome used imitation to master the skill of rhetoric. Only in the last 20-30 years has the great god of "creativity" in art upstaged the tradition of imitation in building a foundation of skills. Did Leonardo daVinci advise his students to "express themselves" on canvas? No, he had th hi M Li Did th t lli t P bl C l tImitation: An Ancient (and Effective) Pedagogy24them copy his Mona Lisa…. Did the great cellist Pablo Casals suggest that his students choose their own bowings, fingerings and dynamics in the Bach partitas they played? No, Casals had them imitate his style with absolute precision, and only when every nuance of their performance was absolutely identical to his, did he say, "Now you know enough to do it differently than me." Why teach writing any differently?- Andrew Pudewa“Imitation: A Common Sense Approach”http://www.writing-edu.com/newsletter/archive.phtml?id=9252283163/2/20105Why Does Imitation Work?• Vygotsky’s “zone of proximal development”Ii iff ld d25•Imitation scaffolds student writing and expands student capabilities. Why Does Imitation Work?• Unskilled writers do not have a clear sense of form.26• Imitation allows unskilled writers to develop form and structure while generating and finding expression for their own ideas.Why Does Imitation Work?• Imitation allows inexperienced writers to learn from those who 27are more experienced.Why Do Students Enjoy Imitation?• Asking students to imitate treats them as writers and collapses the distance between th l d t t28themselves and a text.• Imitation gives students a view of themselves as “real writers.”Why Do Students Enjoy Imitation?Imitation is 29playful.Why Do Students Enjoy Imitation?Imitation cannot be separated from thinking. It is a generative act that allows writers to 30discover and explore thoughts that they may not know that they have.3/2/20106Why Does Imitation Work?“Form is heuristic; it guides a structured search. Faced with an emptiness of form a31an emptiness of form, a human being seeks matter to fill it.”-Richard M. Coe-“An Apology for Form”Imitation: A Flexible Pedagogy• Students can imitate the forms of sentences, paragraphs, or entire texts.32• Students can imitate passages from newspapers, magazines, or the literature they are reading.Imitation: A Flexible Pedagogy• Students can imitate transactional texts (non-fi ti ) ti t t33fiction prose) or poetic