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Idan LavianEnglish 101 Sec. JBMr. Daniel GomesUB Number: 50087728 For the portfolio assignment, I decided to make revisions on the Rhetorical Analysis and OP- ED assignments. I felt I made most of my mistakes in those two essays due to a lack of understanding of the basic requirements .I also found these assignments to be more challenging than the other two essays. The error I repeated in the two assignments was in not elaborating on my statements and ideas. Instead, I briefly mentioned the important parts, and moved on with the essays. I have a strong feeling that I tend to make this significant mistake, due to my experiences in biology and chemistry labs. The usual assignments given in Biology and Chemistry require a written page explaining what happened and what we have learned in the lab. These assignments only need a brief explanation of the essential material instead of elaborating with my own words on the process of the lab For the OP-ED I decided to change the whole structure of the essay, making global changes to make it completely different from the original. I moved the claim of the essay to the introduction, along with an elaboration of my reasoning as to why I stated certain beliefs. The most important local change I made was to elaborate on my opinions. In my essay, I gave reasonable space to presenting the other point of view. The problem was that I did not defend my ideas with a rebuttal; I assumed that my ideas earlier in the essay would cover my defense against the opposing thoughts.For the Rhetorical analysis, I decided to stick to local changes. I changed any grammatical errors that I made and also elaborated on the weaker points I made about the Harrison story. I tried to explain exactly what we could learn from Vonnegut’s skepticism, with supportive quotes included. The first major mistake I made the first time around was when I mentioned how George’s loss of his train of thought, indicates the dangers of having rebellious thoughts. The only thing I did to support my statement was to make a few quotes from the story. I then continued with assumptions as to what Vonnegut was thinking in his writing. What I should have done was to extend the reasoning to show how simile, the rhetorical strategy I used, shows the danger of rebellion against equality. The second major mistake made was when I mentioned that Vonnegut is trying to differentiate equality of rights and equality of abilities to his audience. I jumped to the conclusion that his skeptical thoughts made him think that people will believe that those two equalities are the same thing. What would have been better would have been discuss in detail,equality of rights vs. equality of ability. To only then elaborate on the concern Vonnegut seems to have had, that these two “equalities” may be confused. I feel I have improved my ability to express my thoughts and ideas, at least to some small extent. Although I do tend to be too brief with the description of my claims, at least I support my ideas with articles , (in the OP-ED) , and with Rhetorical Analysis, (in the Harrison story). The laboratory assignments, in my other course work, have helped me recognize quickly the essence of what has to be written. At the same time, I have become limited to onepoint of view. I was therefore challenged when coming to Rhetorical analysis, to decide whatthe thoughts of Vonnegut’s thoughts were. I did improve in this regard in my articles about the missing plane.I would like to continue improving my essay writing ability. It is important to effectively express differing points of view. This will help me understand the thoughts, and enhance my social interactions. At present my goal is to advance to medical school. In the application process to be for medical school, there is an essay that asks the student, why should the applicant attend their specific medical school. To prepare for that question , and similar questions, I could practice and improve my writing ability to demonstrate to the medical schools my creative thinking . Especially in those areas not considered to be a part ofthe regular thought process of a medical student in a laboratory. Showing them I am different and unique will certainly help me work toward the top of the class in Medical


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